Very well-written, my student. I'm pleased to see you've a certain talent for the writing arts. A solid structure combined with a good sense of style, which has been mixed with a feel for thrilling elements and events. Outstanding job and keep up the good work.
Thank you very much, Master Dupar
I was wondering who Huy was... but all in all, it's well written.
Huy is only a character I made up for the story. Might not fit in DB timeline, but it was for the fiction only.