The Dark Side of Love

Hey all,

It's story about my character, Ylith, and
what would happen in a worst case scenario.

Ylith Falls in love, but the Dark Council won't like it.

The Jedi Hunter is accused for espionage and when he falls
in love and showing weakness seen by the Dark Side people
question him...

(Please note: story may change on the way )

Chapter 1, the Jedi mission

Enjoy!

http://www.krath.org/writing/The_Dark_Side_of_Love.htm

Ylith,

I like your story but there are some improvements, mostly grammatical in nature that could improve your story vastly. For instance, throughout the story you spell "through", as "trough". There is a couple other things, would you like me to put them down here on the message board or do you want them at all? ACO Devani

hey kiddo nice one this is W8ing for the otherr
as Devani said u need grammatical improvements.

Yeah I know my gammar has some flaws, but do note: I aint english
So english is my second language and I dont know every part of it, but I try

So my thing is, just read it and enjoy the story, not the grammar

Ylith

Its a good story, very good for a your second language. If you ever need help editing, I'm a fiend for it. LOL

thanks I'll keep that in mind

Ylith