Tuskani
04-07-2005 10:14:49
Diablos
01-09-2005 12:05:41
I wanna know what happened to Jimmy O'Brien. Wasn't there a paedo in this story? Or did I just imagine that? Which is highly possible.
Tuskani
01-09-2005 17:54:40
ah the Jimmy O'Brien conversations in English. He was locked in the transport truck by accident at the beginning so never featured. He will however feature in the soon to be movie hit Jimmy O'Brien: Return of the Paedo.
Diablos
01-09-2005 18:31:03
Excellent! This news pleases me very much!
RevengeX
04-09-2005 10:48:37
The story is well written in my opinion, you should have at least scraped up a B+ or A- in my opinion.
Diablos
04-09-2005 13:08:10
Yeah I think he deserved better too, but our english teacher is STRICT, there's a storry I submitted on here that got me two A's, mmm that's some good [Expletive Deleted]! Of course, it was under my old name of Ifrit.
Mortimus
04-09-2005 14:19:16
I liked the story and the general idea, however, I thought you could have chose better words and constructed sentences better.
But overall, Two thumbs up, you desrved a B at least
At least it's better than what Burgess can write.