I wanna know what happened to Jimmy O'Brien. Wasn't there a paedo in this story? Or did I just imagine that? Which is highly possible.
ah the Jimmy O'Brien conversations in English. He was locked in the transport truck by accident at the beginning so never featured. He will however feature in the soon to be movie hit Jimmy O'Brien: Return of the Paedo.
Excellent! This news pleases me very much!
The story is well written in my opinion, you should have at least scraped up a B+ or A- in my opinion.
Yeah I think he deserved better too, but our english teacher is STRICT, there's a storry I submitted on here that got me two A's, mmm that's some good [Expletive Deleted]! Of course, it was under my old name of Ifrit.
I liked the story and the general idea, however, I thought you could have chose better words and constructed sentences better.
But overall, Two thumbs up, you desrved a B at least
At least it's better than what Burgess can write.