I know this is a Halcyon question topic…but I actually want to make a bunch of statements, if I may (if I may not, then just delete it or move it
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). It concerns the “getting into the head…” and “writing thoughts of opponents…” that you might hear Judges harp on. Personally, I don’t recall ever explaining what we’re talking about with that, rather, I think I tried once but let it go…meh.
First, most know (or, at least, find out during training or qual) that the ACC battles are handled in 3rd person – but which one, gets a lot of folks stumped. I made it a personal goal to try and quell the grammar nazi’s a bit because it was getting too ridiculous. Sure, we still harp on sentence structure and tense, spelling and proofing – but that’s all basic creative writing and poor practices in those areas make for crappy posts; were not English professors. However, is seems that a mechanical ding (like writing an opponent’s thoughts) is actually related to a nit-picky grammar thing…the 3rd person narrative…and its about time that we just said f**k it and laid it out so you know.
I won’t attempt to dazzle anyone with crappy rhetoric, but try and give you a plain view of the narrative style that we expect in the ACC, what it looks like and what the limitations are. I’m going to skip the tenses because that’s too hard to get into without a volley of examples; frankly, I don’t have the time Maybe someone else can hit that one up.
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3rd person, in a nutshell, is writing from “outside”, as an observer – just to get that out of the way. Unless you’re addressing speech, there are no “I”’s, or “me”’s in 3rd person (unless its speech) – it’s all “he, she, him, her…”. Think of watching two people having a conversation, or watching two other players fight in JA/JO – you are playing a 3rd person role, an observer; the same can be said if you’re writing what you witness.
3rd person objective is when you can see all of the action (as stated above) but only have the knowledge of what can be plainly seen. You have no access to the characters’ thoughts, feelings or emotions unless the character displays or acknowledges them. If Joe and Steve are fighting, we are only privy to what we can see. We can see that Joe punched Steve, and we can even see that Steve stumbled backward – but we cannot tell, definitively, if Steve is actually hurt. We cannot tell what his thoughts are. Can a reasonable person assume that a punch hurts? No – not in our world here – all we can know for sure is what we can see, hear or is being displayed.
3rd person limited is when you have access to the thoughts of one of those characters, only one of them. This does not alternate either. If you have access to Joe, then Steve is off limits for the entirety (again, unless he plainly displays or acknowledges them). For instance, if Steve’s face grimaces or winces, depending on the circumstances, you can assume displeasure – but you cannot know the emotion or thought behind what his face is displaying; the display could be fraudulent.
3rd person omniscient is when you have access to the thoughts of all the characters, action, story events – to include those things that the characters may not even witness; like in 3rd person objective. In the omniscient, we can absolutely determine what Steve is thinking in the above example and we also have access to Joe’s thoughts. We can say, without a doubt, that he is in pain, hurt or frightened.
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So what do we hope for in the ACC? In a perfect world we’d hope for a bit of 3rd person objective and limited – save 3rd person omniscient for your fiction writing outside of the ACC. 3rd limited is used where your personal character is concerned and objective where the environment of the battle is concerned. That is, I know Dalthid’s thoughts, because I am writing him. I can write that he feels scared, or hurt or angry. I know his environment, because I am writing him there, I know his actions and his point of view. I also know things he doesn’t – I know that if he backpedals too far he’s going to trip over that log, but Dalthid doesn’t know that (3rd p obj). My opponent can only know those things about Dalthid that I give him to know.
In a battle against Halcyon, however, I don’t know that much about Halc. I can write what his face is showing, I can write the actions he’s performing and even the things he’s saying – to a point – but I cannot know what he is thinking or feeling – that is 3rd person objective. I can see that Halcyon is also going to trip over that log – but I cannot know if he knows its there…confused yet?
In the objective, I can see all the action. In the limited, I can see, think, speak and feel for MY character – but what about my opponent? Well, the problem here is that speech is directly related to thought and the thoughts of my opponent are related to 3rd person omniscient. The 3rd person omniscient is unfair in the ACC because most ACC writers don’t do enough research to adequately or correctly portray the thoughts of their opponents. Some folks in the DB have touched on that in other topics, where we see APP’s standing up to GM’s. That is unlikely in the SW universe. There is a reverence and respect given to Masters – even fear in our cases, but JH Joe Bob rolls up on DJM Snuffy like he’s new on the block? Its just unrealistic – unless Joe Bob, as a character, is just that stupid.
The Omniscient point of view, when used in the ACC, is what you are being dinged on when we tell you “don’t write your opponent’s thoughts” or something of that nature. We tell you “you cannot know your opponent’s thoughts…” because we are saying ‘the most you can hope for, in this scenario as an author, is the ability of an author with 3rd Person Limited or Objective point of view’.
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Okay, so what about the posts? Can an opponent know whatever has been previously written? For example, if I write that Dalthid is scared, but I don’t have him saying it – can my opponent know that to be true? The simple answer is Yes and No, LOL. Any combatant can “assume” anything based on the actions of their opponent – the problem comes when writers take too much or unrealistic liberty. It is a fact that, if I write Dalthid in thought – no opponent can know it, unless something like [LS] is used. However, if I write Dalthid’s actions in a way that can be reasonably assumed (like a cringing face, followed by a growl = angry) then its fair game. We see a lot of times when authors write ‘so and so was scared..’ or ‘the fear was evident…’ but they make absolutely no attempt to justify it, either by the action of the character or a sensing power; that’s no bueno.
In addition, there are speed-bumps that come with speech. As mentioned above, speech is directly related to thought, and thought [of an opponent] directly related to an omniscient author – which we are not, in the ACC. So what is reasonable speech? If a character could reasonably be seen/heard saying something, then its reasonable, LOL. For example, if someone wrote Dalthid saying “yer a piece of podo, boy…” then that can be reasonably assumed; but “Oh, JH Malarkey, you’re so great and strong…” cannot. Speech is a dangerous place to tread with ACC battles, specifically, the speech of your opponent. It is best to keep it at a minimum – or in line with what is written on a character sheet. Thoughts, however, should always be off limits.
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